If I had the key.
If I could tear through
the mesh of time.
If I could repair
what's done,
I would go back
to that night,
that room
and like a slate,
wipe it clean.
What would have become of
us?
All that guilt and longing
driven out of our lives
with one simple word -
No.
(repair,
time, think, no, tear, slate, driven, night, mesh, room, longing,
key, become)
Guilt and longing... it's interesting how they fit together in a lifetime. Strong write. Every word counts.
ReplyDeletePowerful in its leanness--not a superfluous word!
ReplyDeleteA Wee Whirl
i hear you!
ReplyDeleteA simple word, yes... but such a BIG one...
ReplyDeleteI like the honest tone of your poem.
ReplyDeleteVeronica, yes, we have all been there. Economic use of the words.
ReplyDeletePamela
This cries out honestly with great longing, made more powerful by its brevity!
ReplyDeleteI can only echo Wabi Sabi, the brevity and directness here lend power to your message. Really like how you meshed the words in so seamlessly,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
That's one powerful word!
ReplyDeleteSublte yet powerful. Very real.
ReplyDeleteThis piece was beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThank you folks for passing by and bothering to comment. I really appreciate it! :)
ReplyDeleteI went looking for your link to 120... guess you didn't post for that? Anyway I like this. While no is a difficult word, it is one we all need to learn at some point in time.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your visit to my wordle...I'm trying to catch up on returns...