Sunday, July 21, 2013

wordle 118 'If'




If I had the key.
If I could tear through
the mesh of time.
If I could repair
what's done,
I would go back
to that night,
that room
and like a slate,
wipe it clean.
What would have become of us?
All that guilt and longing
driven out of our lives
with one simple word -
No.

(repair, time, think, no, tear, slate, driven, night, mesh, room, longing, key, become)

13 comments:

  1. Guilt and longing... it's interesting how they fit together in a lifetime. Strong write. Every word counts.

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  2. Powerful in its leanness--not a superfluous word!

    A Wee Whirl

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  3. A simple word, yes... but such a BIG one...

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  4. I like the honest tone of your poem.

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  5. Veronica, yes, we have all been there. Economic use of the words.

    Pamela

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  6. This cries out honestly with great longing, made more powerful by its brevity!

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  7. I can only echo Wabi Sabi, the brevity and directness here lend power to your message. Really like how you meshed the words in so seamlessly,

    Elizabeth

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  8. Sublte yet powerful. Very real.

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  9. This piece was beautifully written.

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  10. Thank you folks for passing by and bothering to comment. I really appreciate it! :)

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  11. I went looking for your link to 120... guess you didn't post for that? Anyway I like this. While no is a difficult word, it is one we all need to learn at some point in time.

    Thanks for your visit to my wordle...I'm trying to catch up on returns...

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